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Noi legam prietenii, le dezlegam
Simplu ca pe niste sireturi,
O vreme noi tandru le purtam
Apoi le catalogam drept preturi.

Dupa o vreme le murdarim,
Deja ne provoaca greturi
Pentru altele-n piata ne targuim
Alte sirete sireturi.

Se continua acelasi sir siret
Nu mai stii pe unde esti in lume
Ca o litera exilata din alfabet
Nu formezi nici nume, nici prenume
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impuls Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2010
Strofa I:
Acel "noi" repetat..deranjează puţin. Ai putea īncerca să reconstruiesti, lăsānd doar unul.

Strofele II şi III:
După acel "şirete şireturi", foarte bine ales, aş putea spune, ai continuat cu un "şir şiret" ce forţează puţin lucrurile.

Te felicit totuşi pentru idee. :)
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Zyraxtarenor Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2010
mersi mult de critica ;) foarte apreciata
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Luhter Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Mai da esti mai nou esti poet :P
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Zyraxtarenor Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2009
I am many a marvelous thing, dear boy :) Multam!
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ShadowcatRogue Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2009
reusita si total adevarata! Imi place!
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Zyraxtarenor Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2009
mersi :D si sa stii ca imi pare rau ca e adevarata. de aceea probabil prefer de multe ori naivitatea
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